Mesmerizing but I feel like the ending could benefit from a rework - it just … ends… and on an off-rhythm at that. Maybe one more short paragraph or even sentence may do the trick.
Thanks for reading, BK, and thanks for the comment! I agree that there's something not quite complete about this post, but I was rather fond of the ending sentence, myself! (Maybe that's a reason to get rid of it, in the "kill your darlings" sense).
Mesmerizing but I feel like the ending could benefit from a rework - it just … ends… and on an off-rhythm at that. Maybe one more short paragraph or even sentence may do the trick.
Thanks for reading, BK, and thanks for the comment! I agree that there's something not quite complete about this post, but I was rather fond of the ending sentence, myself! (Maybe that's a reason to get rid of it, in the "kill your darlings" sense).
Bravo